Topic: When people succeed, it’s because of handwork. Luck has noting to do with success. Do u agree or disagree with this statement?
If a person win in a lottery, which worth several billion of dollars, they’ll become millionaire only after one night. He get a big luck that cause jealousy of many other people with doing nothing. Earning money by luck always is dream of almost people, who spent not too little money on prize, poker, house – race... Or even when we was a child, didn’t know anything about treasure or power, we still desire fortune smile on us so that we can be married a pretty prince like in a fairy tale. It can not be deny that sometime luck can bring us to success as fast as unbelievable.
What would be happen if u studied hard in a long time before the exam and u got a bad sick right before that day? What could an athlete do with broken leg in an competition days? Would David Copperfield cry if he forgot all his important equipments right before going through The Great Wall, nomatter how many time of practicing? No one can say one of them were lazy with their works, but they could lost a chance of their lives simply just because of destiny. It’s no wrong when saying that sometime hardworking could lead us nothing.
However, what come easily, go easily. U’ve awarded a lot of things which don’t mean that u can keep all them with you forever. If u don’t work at least for managing
Luck and hard work always go together. U can’t not be idle to wait God compassion, and u absolutely can’t win the destiny, too. Therefore, I’d like to working hard for my future, and also keep seeking a chance in my life.
7 comments:
dear ty,
In that kind of essay, I strongly advise u to make clear if u gree or disagree from the introduction. Neutral opinion is not highly valued. Urs is not neutral in fact but it makes readers feel like that; or it seems that u wrote about the role of success and luck in success, not about if luck has any role in success.
The detail number of salary is not a good idea cause different countries has different standard of living based on average income. American re ppl read ur essay and they don't know u come from a developing nation.
abbreviating is not suggested in an essay and people avoid using it
urs have a lot of grammar mistakes :D
plz comment on my essay :(( no one leave any cm on my essay :((
T_T Grammar & spelling are really my serious problems. I used atocheck in word 2007 but it seemed not to work :(( Tys, Correct it 4 me, plz.
In fact, I don't agree with that statement, but I fogot to write it in the opening of my essay:"> Thanks Ty, next time I'll make it up :))
in addition, I didn't notice when using abbreviation :"> Sory guyz about my stupid mistakes I
@ Ty: because everyone's at school. That's the reason why u haven't got any comments on ur work, sweetie =))
take this book "understanding and using English grammar" of Betty Schrampfer Azar. It is very useful, at least to me. I'm sure it doesn't take u a long time to review grammar, so work hard on it for a time, dear
u should rewrite this essay dear, I will correct grammar for u then
ty,
Lots of mistake and look like you stole some ideas from mai's essay.
I strongly urge you to write the essay seriously. It will improve your writing hundreds times better than do it as you did. Do it so people can happily give you feedback.
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